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Some people think that studying online is more effective than studying on campus. What are the advantages and disadvantages of online study?

In
this
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 contemporary world, technology has invaded numerous aspects of people's lives, especially the educational sector. Thanks to the internet, many
students
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 can recently attend their classes online
instead
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 of
classrooms
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in classrooms
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, which is considered a more effective teaching method
according to
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 some people. In
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 essay, the merits and demerits of e-Learning will be discussed. Regarding the positive outcomes, one of the main benefits of distance learning is the convenience
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offered
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. Since
students
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 can receive any required course from the comfort of their homes, they are given a golden opportunity to gain more
though
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through
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 joining any lectures around the globe.
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, if an Egyptian student wants to earn an MBA degree from any prestigious university in Australia, he will get it without encountering any difficulties
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 there. Another advantageous impact is the affordability of courses at various times during the day. Because of
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 flexible schedule,
students
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 can freely adjust their timetable.
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, they can balance their work duties, study and their personal issues as well. On the flip side, those webinars have some drawbacks that should not be overlooked.
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 conducting courses via screens,
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students-tutors
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 interaction would be limited.
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 results in a noticeable defect in
students
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' social skills as they
could not
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 learn how to discuss and interact effectively.
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, online learning only emphasises
on
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theoretical content.
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 is because it is highly challenging to do practical sessions virtually.
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, those who are enrolled in medicine and engineering programmes are required to perform practical procedures in tandem with theoretical knowledge in order to complete their studies and be certified.
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, even though e-learning has become a more
convenient
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 flexible way
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 conveying information, it
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 holds some cons
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 as the decline of real interaction and the lack of practical sessions

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structure
Use short, simple sentences. Link ideas with words like and, but, so so the text reads better.
content
Give full facts for each idea. Balance the good and bad with more clear details.
grammar
Check spelling and grammar. Some phrases are odd or wrong.
content
The essay shows both sides of online study.
examples
It gives a real example about a student in Egypt and MBA in Australia.
structure
There is an intro and a short ending, which shows plan.

Your opinion

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • flexibility
  • convenience
  • access
  • resources
  • cost-effective
  • affordable
  • diverse
  • global
  • self-discipline
  • self-motivated
  • disciplined
  • personal growth
  • collaborative
  • technical difficulties
  • connectivity
  • disrupt
  • hands-on experience
  • replicate
  • self-motivation
  • proactive
  • challenging
  • distractions
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