You started in your present job two years ago. You now feel it is important for your career development to move to a different department in the same company. Write a letter to your manager. In your letter, say what you have learned in your present job suggest how the company would benefit from moving you to a different department explain why you do not wish to leave the company Write at least 150 words.

Dear Dhruvi, I trust you are doing well. I am writing
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transfer me to the Robotics Department of our company. First and foremost, it has been an unprecedented learning experience in my current role as a Senior Design Engineer. For the past two years, I have developed countless skills from designing small components to an entire injection moulding machine. During
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period, I have realised the importance of having robots to enhance the production output
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reduce scrap.
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, with my expertise in automation combined with manufacturing, I can assist in designing robots
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increased manufacturing productivity.
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leverage my coding knowledge during
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phase to reduce the delays.
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, I have always enjoyed working with each team
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and the working culture in our company is what I think is unmatched.
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, I would like to transfer to the Robotics Department. Thank you. Sincerely, Ruchin Patel

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coherence and cohesion
Try to clearly state your main idea in the first paragraph. This helps the reader know what to expect.
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Make sure each paragraph has one clear point to keep your writing clear and easy to follow.
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Add a sentence to better explain how your skills will help the new department. This makes your point stronger.
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You have a clear and polite tone throughout the letter.
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You provided specific examples of your skills and experiences, which strengthens your request.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • career development
  • transferable skills
  • professional growth
  • department
  • diversify experience
  • benefit
  • contribute
  • innovate
  • perspective
  • team collaboration
  • job satisfaction
  • company loyalty
  • internal transfer
  • long-term commitment
  • value addition
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