Everyone should adopt a vegetarian diet because eating meat an cause serious health problems. Do you agree or disagree?

Presently, a
lot
of people have
health
issues, so some people think that they should follow a vegetarian diet for their
health
. From my point of view, I fully agree that
meat
is made people unhealthy. On the one hand, more and more people love to eat
meat
likes beef, pork and etc., so in the future people will have problems
about
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their
health
.
However
, several people think that
meat
is not cause
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does not cause

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that people
h
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to

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ave care troubles because they think that people do not exercise is a cause.
For example
, if people who eat a
lot
of
meat
, and they do not exercise, they will have some diseases
such
as fat problem and cholesterol.
Thus
, if they do not exercise, they will have
a
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bad
health
.
On the other hand
, more and more people argue that eating
meat
is cause serious problems because
meat
has a
lot
of drawbacks.
For example
, if people eat a
lot
of
meat
, they will flatulence. If they just eat beef and they do not eat
v
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a
the

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egetable, they will flatulence.
Lastly
, people who love fried chickens and eat it
everyday
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every day

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, they will have a problem
on
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their bones.
Therefore
, people should eat more
vegetable
than
meat
for
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to

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make
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their
health
better than before. To sum up, today people prefer to eat
meat
more than
vegetable
, it makes people have a
lot
of serious care problems, so people should
to
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apply

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eat
v
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a

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egetable to protect their
health
and I strongly agree that people should not eat
meat
too much, and they should turn to eat more salads.
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