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The continued rise in the world’s population is the greatest problem faced by humanity at the present time. What are the causes of this continued rise? Do you agree that it is the greatest problem faced by humanity?

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The major issue faced by the current generation is the increase in
population
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. Advancement in medical technology is the reason for the rise in
population
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. Though, over-
population
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 has its own complication. In my view, the climatic changes is a far more serious problem than the
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 explosion.
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, improvement in the medical sector has greatly revolutionized the
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 trend.
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various diagnosis for people to conceive children.
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 recent development includes the introduction of artificial fertilization. Where they give alternative preferences for people suffering from low fertility rate.
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, when some patient undergoes miscarriage due to a weak immune system. The medical experts provide alternate solutions
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 as treatment and medication.
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 results in an alarming rise in
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 in recent days. Though the
population
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 grow higher each year which ultimately lead to the exploitation of resources, I think climatic changes are the most dangerous encounter humanity will ever face. Due to human activities, the earth’s temperature has greatly raised to the level where they affect climate changes.
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, if the earth’s temperature rise by 1 degree Fahrenheit it is estimated that the glaciers will start melting which ultimately resulting in increasing sea level which leads to flood and tsunami destroying the human
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. In conclusion, even though the growth of
population
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 leads to exploitation of resources climatic changes will greatly affect the human lives.
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