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In some countries an increasing number of people are suffering from health problems as a result of eating too much fast food. It is therefore necessary for governments to impose a higher tax on this kind of food. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion?

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Issues related to fast
food
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 are frequently discussed these days. It is argued that governments should release a higher
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 on fast
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 because of increasing fast
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 consumption that can lead to health problems. I firmly disagree with
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 assertion and the explanation will be shown. The principal reason is that
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 is not the root of the problem. To explain,  A higher
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food
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tax
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 paid to governments will impact on rising product prices because producers need equal their benefits.
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, some people especially poor people cannot effort to consume
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 kind of foodstuff. In fact, most consumers of
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 meal in some countries are The poor.
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, the majority consumer of Hungry Jack, Australian convenient diet, is labour because of its cost as well as size. An additional point is that higher
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 can result in some sectors of the industrial productions ;
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 as local farm and employee.
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, workers may be laid off since producers need to reduce the cost of the productions.
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 means that higher
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 rarely affects the middle and upper-class people which are the great proportion of fast
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 consumption in many countries but directly affect the poor class. Generally, people opt to eat convenient stuff as
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 can easily eat. Most people have not concerned about their health problems.
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, individuals should be more educated about the effect of fast
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 on their bodies rather than receive a higher
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. In conclusion, getting a higher
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 on fast
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 is not a suitable way to tackle the problem of getting too much fast
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 in the countries.
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 individuals and governments should share responsibilities to cope with
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 issue.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • public health
  • obesity
  • diabetes
  • heart disease
  • health outcomes
  • healthcare costs
  • consumer behavior
  • socio-economic backgrounds
  • ethical implications
  • public health campaigns
  • subsidies
  • regulations
  • nutritional content
  • healthier food options
  • government intervention
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