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Some people spend a lot of money for their wedding ceremonies. However, others feel like it is unnecessary to spend a lot. Discuss both viewpoints and give your own opinion.

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Several people pay a
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edding. Even though, some people think that it is very expensive and unnecessary. From my point of view, they should not spend
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this
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ceremony
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 a
lot
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. On the one hand, every country around the world people particularly women want to
married
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, so if they have
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eremony, they want to design a
lot
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 on their hall, so some people prefer to spend a
lot
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money
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thier
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their
 wedding halls and they think that it is very important for their wedding.
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, when they get married, they always to look
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many things. They
are not only think
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 about their dresses, places and foods but
also
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 furniture and guests, so all of these will make them
to
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pay a
lot
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money
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.
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, they think that it is not expensive because it is necessary.
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, other people argue that people who spend
money
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 for wedding ceremonies a
lot
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, it is very unnecessary because a
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 of people believe that
whan
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when
what
 they married already, they will have other expenditures that important than
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eremony. Some people in the worldwide have boyfriends and girlfriends, but they do not want to
married
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 because it must use a
lot
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 of
money
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, so they prefer to arrange in a small
ceremony
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. They want to have more
money
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 after they married, so they decided about wedding ceremonies is not important and unnecessary to spend a
lot
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 on it. These are
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easons why
that
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people say that wedding is not essential. To sum up, today, many people married, and they pay much
money
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 for their ceremonies because they think it is essential.
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, more and more people including me believe that they should not lose a
lot
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edding.
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