You saw a brochure for a one-week walking tour in the mountains. You're very interested in taking part, but you're not very fit and are worried you wouldn't be able to keep up. Write to the tour operator. In your letter: • Explain why you're interested in the tour. • Ask for information about dates and prices. • Express your concerns about your fitness level.

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Dear Sir or Madam, I am writing to you with regards to a brochure that caught my attention recently, for a one-week trekking trip in the hills. I would like to express my interest in participating in the event. Since I am recuperating from a major accident a few months ago, it would be really helpful if you could arrange a slot for me to join the tour, as a part of my therapy requires walking; to exercise my legs.

Also

, I am an avid walker, love to explore nature, especially in cold climates. The pamphlet

however

did not contain the agenda of

this

trip,

however

, if you could share it with me, I can be prepared to carry all necessary items. Let me

also

point out that, due to my recovery process, it may be a little difficult for me to catch up with the others.

Nevertheless

, I am very keen on joining the trek, and make sure that nobody will need to wait for me. Hoping that you would consider my interest. Thanking you, yours sincerely, Peter.

Submitted by ash.fuji2018 on Mon Jan 04 2021

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Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately

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secondly
thirdly
in additional
moreover
also
for example
for instance
therefore
however
although
even though
despite

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meeting the goal of 7 or more
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9 paragraphs

179 words

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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 6.0

Logical structure

Single idea per paragraph

Greeting and closing

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 9.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 9.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 7.0

Complete response

Suitable writing tone

Appropriate word count

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