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Universities should accept equal numbers of male and female students in every subject. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

#universities #numbers #students
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the same numbers of boys and girls pupils in every school
subject
;
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, certain groups of people oppose and affirm that every child is unique especially regarding their genders so it is logical to take a distinct number of male and female students in a particular course. I reckon a university should get more boys in math class than girls.
First
 of all, it is an inevitable fact that male students have facilities in learning
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science
 related subjects, while girls have a linguistic talent. It is better to use time and money in a field a student was born gifted, as there is a high possibility that the pupil will get called as a prodigy after spending a particular time in his or her talented
subject
.
For instance
, Rayleigh, whose parents obliged him to become a writer, but he had no interest and
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ability
 in
litareture
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literature
, so he left his daily job and chased his passion for becoming a scientist. After years of ups-and-down, he single-handedly learned all the principles of physics and regarded as one of the most brilliant
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 the world.
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, it is crucial to know
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what
subject
 a pupil was born apt.
Secondly
, the student who chose the right course will always stay satisfied and vibrant, meaning he or she is going in the way.
For example
, it is said that a fish swims better than any animal, but it will suffer if it obligated to climb a tree.
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 on what course he has chosen. In conclusion, from the ideas and examples given, I firmly believe that colleges must accept pupils who only has a talent in that
subject
 so that the student will surely succeed in the future.
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