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Missions to explore space are hugely expensive, and there are problems on Earth which demand attention. The number of these missions needs to be reduced. Do you agree or disagree?

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Numerous
charaters
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 deem it is a wastage of time and
money
 to explore space;
in contrast
, certain groups of people oppose and affirm
these
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money
 must get directed to other issues existing in the world. I reckon we should settle
firstly
 all problems in our planet.
First
 of all, tons of
money
 is consumed in the past on
exporing
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exploring
 space, but people did not
availed
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 from
this
 science. All innovations human-beings had made before were based on the world's
recources
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resources
, and have not discovered all crafting material in the earth.
Besides
, it is too early for humanity to start studying astronomy, and needed state-of-the-art technologies have not invented yet.
For example
, Rayleigh, the former NASA worker, said astronomy is an expensive way of squandering
money
; we have not got anything valuable for the population.
Hence
, the governments
shoulf
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should
 discover all the mysteries and uncanny materials hidden under the soil.
Secondly
, there are many anguishing enormous problems
of
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in
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our planet. The
money
 used to research space should have been directed in world-facing issues.
For instance
, in South Africa,
in
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every 15 seconds, one man passes away because of starving, which is one of the big obstacles the world's population is facing now.
Thus
, the United Nations must settle starving
immediatly
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immediately
 by ceasing projects relating to astronomy so that we are one step closer to make our planet a happier place. In conclusion, from the ideas and examples given, I firmly believe researching the galaxy is a futile activity for today.
Therefore
, our top priority is to solve global issues.
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