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It is thought by some that it is better to live in the city while others believe that life is better in the countryside. Discuss both sides and give your own opinion.

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Urbanisation has made many
people
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 move from the countryside to settle down in various towns and cities. While some believe it is better to live in the
city
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, others believe it is preferable to live in a rural area. In my opinion, I believe
people
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 should live in the
city
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 as it exposes them to different opportunities. On the one hand, most
people
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 live or move to the
city
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 because of job prospects.
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, it is easier to secure employment, especially for professionals, since most of the big industries and companies are situated in the cities.
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,
this
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 explains the high influx of
people
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 moving to the
city
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 to search for greener pastures. To illustrate
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, research carried out in Lagos by the University of Lagos in 2010 found out that more than 80% of students who studied at the institution stayed back to pursue a career in the state
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 of going back to their hometown. For
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 reason, many students prefer to reside in the
city
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.
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, living conditions in the countryside are more affordable.
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,
people
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 choose to live there
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 of the lower cost of living.
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, things are cheaper in
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 place than in the
city
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. One clear example is that
people
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 do not have to spend a fortune to get good accommodation as it is easier to afford rent. Another example is that life is less stressful as most families do not have to go through hardship to survive on a daily basis. Conclusively, life in the countryside could be cost-effective and not overwhelming for some
people
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, but I believe living in the
city
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, there are better employment opportunities and
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 generally improve their living conditions.

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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • metropolitan
  • infrastructure
  • cosmopolitan
  • commute
  • sociocultural
  • prosperity
  • sustainability
  • rural
  • tranquility
  • urbanization
  • relocation
  • residential
  • populace
  • ecological footprint
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