In the future, more people will choose to go on holiday in their own country and not travel abroad on holiday? Do you agree or disagree? Give reasons for your answer and include relevant examples from your own knowledge and experience
In the modern era, most
people
are choosing their holiday
plans for their own country
and others to go abroad. However
, I strongly agree that many people
would like to spend their holidays in their own country
,
because there are good communications, reasonable transport facilities, and unique traditional places.
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To begin
with, many people
will choose their own destination to spend time on holiday
because of good language skills. They can able to communicate with all people
as well as
, they are expert
in languages. Fix the agreement mistake
experts
Additionally
, people
will choose the best transportation to travel to their destination in less amount but abroad it will charge 4 times higher than it. For instance
, recently, one of my friends went to Malaysia for his holiday
and he spent more than a lakh for just 3 days. Compared to the foreign location, the home
country
is the better choice to save and visit more locations.
On the other hand
, there are some traditional places to visit in a home
country
like in India such
as Bragadheeswarar temple, Taj Mahal, Red fort, India gate and more locations to explore, if a foreign country
considers more money to spend on transport,
and accommodation. Remove the comma
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People
will get some benefits from travelling in their own country
which is really good. For example
, if people
book in advance for the tickets, they can get some discount offers. Moreover
, they have knowledge about the country
rule’s and regulations to do some activities like do
not taking photographs in public areas.
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To conclude
, many people
are recommended to go for holidays in their home
country
and others like foreign countries. When compared to both ideas, I strongly believe that spending a holiday
in my home
country
is the best choice to get more benefits like languages, less money for transportation and living, also
they are well known in traditional places so they are familiar with travel to go there. In future, many people
will love to explore their own country
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Task Response
Make sure to balance the evidence and examples throughout your essay to strengthen your argument. Try to include equal weight for both benefits of domestic and international travel to showcase a fair comparison.
Coherence and Cohesion
Ensure clear topic sentences and transition signals in each paragraph. This helps guide the reader smoothly through your ideas.
Task Response
You have successfully included relevant examples from personal experience that make your argument more convincing.
Coherence and Cohesion
The essay has a clear introduction and conclusion, effectively framing your argument.
Coherence and Cohesion
The main points are logically structured, making it easy to follow your line of reasoning.