In the future, more people will choose to go on holiday in their own country and not travel abroad on holiday? Do you agree or disagree? Give reasons for your answer and include relevant examples from your own knowledge and experience

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In the modern era, most
people
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are choosing their
holiday
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plans for their own
country
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and others to go abroad.
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, I strongly agree that many
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would like to spend their holidays in their own
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because there are good communications, reasonable transport facilities, and unique traditional places.
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with, many
people
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will choose their own destination to spend time on
holiday
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because of good language skills. They can able to communicate with all
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as well as
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, they are
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in languages.
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,
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will choose the best transportation to travel to their destination in less amount but abroad it will charge 4 times higher than it.
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, recently, one of my friends went to Malaysia for his
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and he spent more than a lakh for just 3 days. Compared to the foreign location, the
home
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country
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is the better choice to save and visit more locations.
On the other hand
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, there are some traditional places to visit in a
home
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country
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like in India
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as Bragadheeswarar temple, Taj Mahal, Red fort, India gate and more locations to explore, if a foreign
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considers more money to spend on transport
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and accommodation.
People
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will get some benefits from travelling in their own
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which is really good.
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, if
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book in advance for the tickets, they can get some discount offers.
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, they have knowledge about the
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rule’s and regulations to do some activities like
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not taking photographs in public areas.
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, many
people
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are recommended to go for holidays in their
home
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country
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and others like foreign countries. When compared to both ideas, I strongly believe that spending a
holiday
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in my
home
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country
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is the best choice to get more benefits like languages, less money for transportation and living,
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they are well known in traditional places so they are familiar with travel to go there. In future, many
people
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will love to explore their own
country
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Task Response
Make sure to balance the evidence and examples throughout your essay to strengthen your argument. Try to include equal weight for both benefits of domestic and international travel to showcase a fair comparison.
Coherence and Cohesion
Ensure clear topic sentences and transition signals in each paragraph. This helps guide the reader smoothly through your ideas.
Task Response
You have successfully included relevant examples from personal experience that make your argument more convincing.
Coherence and Cohesion
The essay has a clear introduction and conclusion, effectively framing your argument.
Coherence and Cohesion
The main points are logically structured, making it easy to follow your line of reasoning.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • domestic tourism
  • international travel
  • cultural exchange
  • national pride
  • affordability
  • convenience
  • ecotourism
  • heritage sites
  • local businesses
  • comfort zone
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