The charts below show local government expenditure in 2000 and 2010. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

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This

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pie chart provides information comparing local

government

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spending in Education, Healthcare, Pensions, Defence, Welfare, Interest on borrowing, Transport, Culture and leisure and others in 2000 and 2010.

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, what stands out from the pie chart in 2000 and 2010 is that

government

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the expenditure on Education takes up nearly a quarter of both pie charts in 2000 and 2010.

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, it is interesting to note that there was more

money

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spent on Defence in 2000 than in 2010.

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with, if we look at that Education in 2000 and 2010, which

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at 24% and 21% in turn.The

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the most spend

money

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in Healthcare in 2000 and 2010, which

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21% and 20% in turn.

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, it is striking to see that the

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spent on Pensions in 2000 the

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spent in 2010, at 19% .

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, In 2000, the local

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spent 17%

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Defence, it's costed 3% more than

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in 2010

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which

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apply

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14%

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in.

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, in 2010, the local

government

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spend more

money

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on Welfare than in 2000. which is increased 5%, from 8% to 13%.

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,Interest

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borrowing

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same

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the same

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as Welfare, for 2000 and 2010, rose 5% from 5% to 10% in turn.The least spent

money

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in Transport, culture and leisure, other in 2000, at 3%,2%,1% in turn, in 2010, which is all the same per cent, with 1%.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words government, money with synonyms.

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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "information" in your introduction.

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Vocabulary: The word "chart" was used 3 times.

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Vocabulary: The word "go" was used 4 times.

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Vocabulary: The word "go" was used 4 times.

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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 8.0

Logical structure

Single idea per paragraph

Introduction & conclusion present

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 9.0

Complete response

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4 paragraphs

227 words

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The charts below show local government expenditure in 2000 and 2010. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

In many countries, more and more people choose to buy imported food rather than food produced locally. Why people buy imported food? What could be done to encourage people buy local food?

Some people say that the main environmental problem of our times is the loss of particular species of plants and animals. Others say that there are more important environmental problems. Discuss both these views and give your opinion.

some people say technology have made people social while other disagree discuiss both views and give your opinion'