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Public libraries should only provide books and should not waste their limited resources on expensive high-tech media such as software, videos or DVDs. Do you agree or disagree

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reat source of information. Many people believe that only books should be ‎provided in public libraries, and having DVDs and videos there is
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aste of money. I completely ‎disagree with
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 DVDs and videos is that using these ‎sources can reduce the number of trees that are being cut down every day. Papers are made from ‎wood , the main source of wood
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 forests and jungles, which provide oxygen for our planet. Books ‎require a sizeable number of trees and eliminating them by other sources can be beneficial for the ‎environment.
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, Using DVDs not only can save a vast number of trees, but it will
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leaner environment within a few years.‎
On the other hand
, DVDs and videos have longer life cycles. Despite advances that have been made in ‎increasing the life cycle of books, keeping them in secure places in museums
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for instance
, they are not ‎as durable as DVDs, or videos that are usually made out of recycled plastic. If libraries invest
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 DVDs ‎and other types of data storage devices, they will greatly reduce their expenditure in the long run. In ‎other words, the more investments
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 recent storage technology, the lower the cost would be. ‎ ‎ In conclusion, I would rather our government invested on DVDs and videos for libraries rather than ‎new books, because in
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