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Supermarkets should only sell food produced from within their own country rather than imports from overseas. What are your opinions on this?

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Retail stores have a wide variety of options in terms of groceries and other home essentials. It has been debatable that they should sell goods which are grown in the homeland rather than imported from other countries. In my opinion, there should be options available for the buyers to choose among which they would like to go for depending on their choice. In
this
 essay, we will discuss various reasons to justify my perspective.
Firstly
, many food articles are not produced domestically in our own country.
Therefore
, there is a need to import certain commodities which can be consumed by native people.
For instance
, Kiwi is a fruit which is harvested in New Zealand is in great demand overseas and enjoyed by people of different cultures.
Therefore
, to fulfil increasing demand in foreign markets, major stores keep a stock of
this
 fruit.
Moreover
, due to an increase in demand for certain items and
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hortage of supply
also
 becomes a major reason for import. One
such
 example is olive oil which has been replaced with other cooking oils in many kitchens while preparing food because of its high nutritional value which
further
 minimizes the risk of other ailments as per multiple surveys conducted by health institutes.
Subsequently
,
this
 has emerged a need to transport Olives to our country so that availability would be in abundance. In conclusion, there are many underlying factors which generate a need for items to be added to our shopping baskets from other nations apart from those which are domestically produced.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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