In many countries the level of crime is increasing and crimes are becoming more violent. Why do you think this is and what can be done about it? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your experience. Write at least 250 words.

In recent times,

crime

has

became

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a global issue and it is increasing at an alarming rate. I believe major reasons behind

this

are lack of

education

and unemployment rates. To resolve

this

problem, the

government

should come up with employment opportunities and free

education

for people in the breadline. Nowadays, the

crime

rates are enormous due to the lack of basic

education

and jobs.

Education

plays a significant role in shaping the behavioural pattern of people, which in turn makes them

to

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understand the true meaning of their deeds.

However

, in developing countries

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the vast majority of

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the

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population are illiterate, which has a deleterious impact on

the

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society.

In addition

to

this

, as it is rightly said, “An idle mind is a devil’s workshop"

,

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when people are without jobs, they tend to steal or go to any extreme to full fill their basic needs.

As a result

, they take

crime

as an option to acquire all the richness in life. To tackle these predicaments, the

government

should take initiatives to provide free primary

education

to all people regardless of the status in

the

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society, particularly in rural areas.

This

would bring a drastic change in

i

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an

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ndividual’s mind and thinking ability.

Moreover

, the

government

should bring forth a plethora of job options so that each and every individual will have his earning, that might not force him to think in a crooked way.

Similarly

, the

government

can come up with compensations. In lieu of compensation, people should be made to do social and community work. In conclusion, there is

an

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whopping increase in the

crime

levels due to illiteracy and unemployment, which could be eradicated by the adequate measures of the

government

in the form of providing free primary

education

to all, and by creating jobs opportunities.