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The given line diagram illustrates and compares the rate of vehicle’s robbery per
thousand
 vehicles in Great
Britain
,
Sweden
, France and Canada from 1990 to 1999. Overall,
cases
 of vehicle’s thievery remain more or less unchanged in Canada and France. While the number of thefts in
Sweden
 rose gradually, it experienced some fluctuation in Great
Britain
. In terms of France and Canada,
Although
 the rate of car theft decreased from 1990 to 1993 in both the countries, theft
cases
 increased slightly and amounted to approximately 6 per
thousand
 at the end of the year 1999. In regards to
Sweden
 and Great
Britain
, thievery
cases
 in Great
Britain
 outnumbered all the cities during the given time frame despite experiencing some fluctuation.
Although
 there was a huge gap between the
cases
 in Great
Britain
 and in
Sweden
 (around 11 per
thousand
), the difference narrowed down from 1990 to 1999 and became 2-3 per
thousand
.
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