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These days in many countries, fewer and fewer people want to become teachers, particularly in secondary schools. What are the reasons for this, and how could the problem be solved? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

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The given line diagram illustrates and compares the rate of vehicle’s robbery per
thousand
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 vehicles in Great
Britain
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,
Sweden
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, France and Canada from 1990 to 1999. Overall,
cases
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 of vehicle’s thievery remain more or less unchanged in Canada and France. While the number of thefts in
Sweden
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 rose gradually, it experienced some fluctuation in Great
Britain
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. In terms of France and Canada,
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 the rate of car theft decreased from 1990 to 1993 in both the countries, theft
cases
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 increased slightly and amounted to approximately 6 per
thousand
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 at the end of the year 1999. In regards to
Sweden
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 and Great
Britain
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, thievery
cases
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 in Great
Britain
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 outnumbered all the cities during the given time frame despite experiencing some fluctuation.
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 there was a huge gap between the
cases
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 in Great
Britain
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 and in
Sweden
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 (around 11 per
thousand
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), the difference narrowed down from 1990 to 1999 and became 2-3 per
thousand
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.
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