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Some of the methods used in advertising are unethical and unacceptable in today’s society. To what extent do you agree with this view?

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Many people believe that there
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 inappropriate and unprofessional advertisements used recently in society. From my perspective, I strongly agree with
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 approach, nowadays, some methods of advertising become unacceptable, especially when geared toward
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 clearly, companies advertise their objects whatever their effect on
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opulation. Many of these products have had
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egative influence on people especially younger ones who can not differentiate between bad and good things. An obvious example of these commercials, those of fast food or soda drinks, which is considered the main cause of obesity between generations in
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recent years. Sponsors are used to enforcing their adverts on us while we are watching TV or browsing the web.
Children
 pester their parents to buy these issues, schools need to increase awareness of
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rawbacks of these objects.
Besides
, the use of
children
 movies’ heroes to offer publicity of some institutions’ appliance is unethical. Much more of manufacturers nowadays focus on their profits without taking in consideration moral values. So, public organizations together with governments should take their responsibilities to protect consumers from there announcements, by banning exhibiting of harmful things.
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, smoking posters should be prohibited by law in any place
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erves
children
 or adolescents. In conclusion, while ways of advertising become unprofessional, unacceptable and sometimes unethical, we need to increase the awareness of their negative impacts as well as set rules and restrictions for institutions to follow.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Unethical
  • Unacceptable
  • Deceptive
  • Exaggerated
  • Misleading
  • Manipulation
  • Vulnerable
  • Targeted advertising
  • Perpetuation
  • Societal norms
  • Stereotypes
  • Negative body image
  • Intrusion of privacy
  • Data-driven
  • Over-saturation
  • Desensitization
  • Annoyance
  • Greenwashing
  • Eco-conscious
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