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Life has become much more stressful compared to our parent’s generation. As a result, stress-related illnesses are increasing around the world. Why is stress such widespread in the modern world and what do you think can be done to overcome the problems caused by stress?

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Stress
-related illnesses are becoming increasingly common especially in today's fast-paced world and considered one of the aspects of modern
life
 comparing with parent's
life
.
This
essay
,we will discuss the cause of the increase of
stress
 including pressure related to
work
. In
this
essay
also
 we will demonstrate a potential solution that can be implemented to reduce the
stress
.
People
 trying to preserve their
work
 as the environment of the
work
 become competitive domine.
As a result
,
people
 keep working for longer hours and spent a lot of effort more than the usually required to exceed their employer's expectation which increases the
stress
 on them. Due to
this
,
people
 start suffering from illnesses related to
stress
.
For example
, recent research showed that the number of
people
 having
stress
 has been increased significantly compering with 25 years ago.
This
 often results in more
stress
 because of a workforce which was completely different and less compering with past years. Maintaining a good balance between social
life
 and
work
 considered one of the potential solution that has a huge influence on our health.
People
 should understand that they have to practice their
life
 properly in order to diminish the pressure related to
work
. BBC News reported that the number of
people
 suffering from
stress
 has been reduced a lot after balancing between their
life
 and
work
. In conclusion,
people
 struggling from
stress
-related illnesses in modern
life
 due to workforce.
This
essay
 has discussed why modern
life
 more stressful than our parent's
life
.
This
essay
 has suggested a solution to reduce
stress
.
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