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Many working people get little or no exercise either during the working day or in their free time, and have health problems as a result. Why do so many working people not get enough exercise? What can be done about this problem?

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In recent years,
people
 have been living a sedentary lifestyle which leads to serious health problems. In
this
 essay, I will discuss the reason behind
this
 problem and what can be done to tackle it.
To begin
 with, due to the fact that most attractive vacancies are office-based.
people
 nowadays tend to work a 9 to 5 job without moving from their places.
This
 long working hour causes employees to be exhausted which renders doing exercise impossible even in their free time. Another reason contributing to
this
 is that the dependency on technology that entices
people
 to perform even the simplest task with minimum or no effort at all.
For example
, citizens today can issue any governmental papers
such
 as personal ID and car license with the comfort of their homes thanks to the development of the information technology. There is a number of remedies to
this
 stationary lifestyle. One solution is to encourage business's owners to offer incentives for their employees in form of exercise facilities or a gym membership.
This
 approach will not only improve peoples health but
also
 will increase the company's profit.
This
 is because healthier employees will perform better. Another solution is to invest transportation system and routes infrastructure.
This
 will encourage
people
 to walk to the nearest station
instead
 of taking private cars.
Finally
, the government can promote cycling by offering free bicycle parking and dedicate specific lanes on roads for cycling. In conclusion,
Although
 long working hours and technology have an enormous impact on
people
's lifestyle. the government along with individual can tackle
this
 issue by adopting the right measures.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Time constraints
  • Sedentary lifestyle
  • Passive leisure activities
  • Workplace wellness programs
  • Active commuting
  • Subsidized
  • Public awareness
  • Health benefits
  • Incentivizing
  • Accessible public spaces
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