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Certain people truly believe that planning for the future is a complete waste of time. They think that the present should be the main focus. Do you agree with this view?

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Some
people
 tend to think that it is more important to live for a moment and enjoy the present than to make
plans
 for the
future
.
However
, the issue is not entirely straightforward, and arguments can
also
 be made against the idea.
This
 essay will discuss the debate, and give a concluding view. On the one hand, making
plans
 for the
future
 can motivate
people
 to achieve their goals and
as a result
 increase the quality of their lives. Because if there are clearly formulated goals and
people
 really can reach them, it will provide more confidence and success in many aspects of
people
’s lives.
Furthermore
, certain
plans
 help to organize and control
life
 better.
Therefore
 individuals will understand how much effort they need to contribute.
In contrast
,
people
 can not even notice how the significant amount of time they spend
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thinking about the
future
, so there is a risk of missing moments of current
life
. If they are obsessed with making
plans
 and strictly follow them, not only can they lose themselves in pursuit of
future
life
, but
also
 it can lead to mental problems. In
such
 situations, stress is distributed because it is impossible for individuals to understand the contribution to their lives, at the moment their attention
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 only to the
future
.
Finally
, it seems to me that
people
 should try to find a balance.
People
 should concentrate their attention on
present
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 as much as on
future
life
. Because without a clear and healthy
mind
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 they obtain at the moment, it is impossible to create good
plans
 for the
future
.
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