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Certain people truly believe that planning for the future is a complete waste of time. They think that the present should be the main focus. Do you agree with this view?

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Some
people
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 tend to think that it is more important to live for a moment and enjoy the present than to make
plans
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 for the
future
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.
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, the issue is not entirely straightforward, and arguments can
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 be made against the idea.
This
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 essay will discuss the debate, and give a concluding view. On the one hand, making
plans
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 for the
future
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 can motivate
people
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 to achieve their goals and
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 increase the quality of their lives. Because if there are clearly formulated goals and
people
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 really can reach them, it will provide more confidence and success in many aspects of
people
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’s lives.
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, certain
plans
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 help to organize and control
life
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 better.
Therefore
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 individuals will understand how much effort they need to contribute.
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,
people
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 can not even notice how the significant amount of time they spend
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thinking about the
future
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, so there is a risk of missing moments of current
life
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. If they are obsessed with making
plans
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 and strictly follow them, not only can they lose themselves in pursuit of
future
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life
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, but
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 it can lead to mental problems. In
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 situations, stress is distributed because it is impossible for individuals to understand the contribution to their lives, at the moment their attention
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direct
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 only to the
future
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.
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, it seems to me that
people
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 should try to find a balance.
People
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 should concentrate their attention on
present
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 as much as on
future
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life
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. Because without a clear and healthy
mind
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mind,
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 they obtain at the moment, it is impossible to create good
plans
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 for the
future
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    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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