Some people think that the (government should provide (assistance) to (all kinds of artists) including painters, musicians, and poets. However, other people think that (this is a waste of money). Discuss both views and give your opinion.
A highly controversial issue relates
whether
the state should offer support to artists in general or if Change preposition
to whether
this
measure is only a matter of wasting people's money. In this
essay, I will examine both points of view and explain why I believe that the arguments against the
assistance are stronger.
It is commonly believed that artist should receive some extra money from Correct article usage
apply
governs
in order Replace the word
the government
o
entice them to Change preposition
to
keed
their jobs Correct your spelling
keep
considerable
outweighs its disadvantages. The main reason for believing Change the word
considerably
this
is that arts
, in general, are important for society
entertainment, which involves music, painting or acting; Change noun form
society's
therefore
, artists are considered to be the tools that make arts
. It is Fix the agreement mistake
art
also
possible to say that this
enterprise come
forward to evaluate society. A good example here Change the verb form
comes
are
the songs played by important musicians Change the verb form
is
along
the years Change preposition
over
such
as Beethoven, Mozart
to name but a few that Correct word choice
and Mozart
represents
an important historical context in each period of society.
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represent
On the other hand
, others believe that arts
should not have finance
support from the government, which means that there are other important measures that call for an emergency. It is often argued that issues related to safety, education and health, which Replace the word
financial
is
encountered in Correct subject-verb agreement
are
the
most part of cities, are Correct article usage
apply
a
way more important than Correct article usage
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arts
. A second point is that individuals can perfectly live without Correct article usage
the arts
resort
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resorting
arts
while
no one can live without health. A particularly good example here is in Brazil, where millions of reais are spent every year by the government with carnival an important local festival, however
, its rates of lower education call for more investment.
In conclusion, both arguments have their merits. On balance, however
, I feel that arts
should not count on public money at all. This
is because there are other important issues to be solved that governments can not rule out at
any circumstance Change preposition
in
such
as health and safety.Submitted by Marcel on
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