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Some people say that students should be given more homework.Others say that children should be free to enjoy their youth. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

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Some people say that
students
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 should be given more
homework
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.Others say that children should be free to enjoy their youth. The discussion of
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 since time immemorial . Traditional
teachers
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 prefer more
homework
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 as they think that student generally
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 their time while modern
teachers
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 think that the
students
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 should
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 through all angles. Strict
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 generally think that the curriculum they are delivering is
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 of the best and knowledge provided in the book is very important for the child to cope up in the world
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on the other hand
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 lenient
teachers
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 think that
students
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 need to know about every aspect of life and they should
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 be able to enjoy their life to
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ull extent as we get
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 only once. If we introspect the philosophy of both the groups thoroughly , we can say that
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both the groups are correct to
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arge extent.
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 provided in the books is important as well as knowledge gained by doing
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 activities as well enjoyment which reduces the stress in
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’s life. So, a proper balance should be there between studies and leisure time or we can say that
teachers
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 should give
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ppropriate amount of
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 so
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tudent could learn about important things and can relax
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 more way to have a solution is that the
homework
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 should be made as much interesting as it can be making
students
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 feel like they were just having fun. At
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we can say that no
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 is ever correct hundred
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 and no
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 is wrong.The only balance needs to be made which in
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 case is
students
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 having interesting and appropriate
homework
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 making them knowledgeable and relaxed.

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For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

Our recommended essay structure above comprises of fifteen (15) sentences, which will make your essay approximately 250 to 275 words.

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