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Information technology is changing many aspects of our lives and now dominates our home, leisure and work activities. To what extent do the benefits of information technology outweigh the disadvantages?

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In modern
life
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technology
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 is changing many spheres of our
life
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, that process has some good and bad sides. I guess for nowadays youngsters these changes have more advantages and in
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 essay, I want to discuss some of them. Main of the huge pluses of developing
information
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technology
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 in modern
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 might be a simple opportunity to find huge numbers of sources for self-education.
People
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 who want to increase their level of knowledge in some spheres can find a lot of
information
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 in open sources like youtube. They can follow some social groups on the internet who have the same interests in education and can share
information
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 about some subjects on social media. As youtube statistic said that the numbers of tutorial videos increased the
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 four years.
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,
information
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technology
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 can help
people
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 find friends and share their culture with other countries. All
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 connection with outlanders can help ruined stereotypes and help youngsters be openminded for new ideas. If someone feels loneliness they will have a good opportunity to find new friends or interests in social media. As statistic of Google said five from ten
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, in social media, have friends from foreign countries. One of the valuable disadvantages of the influence of
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technology
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 progress might be a sedentary lifestyle. Youngsters prefer to sit in front of monitors or mobile phones and like aftermath they have a poor health condition.
Unfortunatelly
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Unfortunately
, many
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 avoid sports activity and prefer to escape in the fiction computer world.
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, we have many examples of illness connected with the vertebra. In conclusion, I want to say that modern computer
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 helps us to develop our knowledge and be closer to each other at any distance. I guess if
people
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 find a balance between
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 technologies and sport activity they will be successful in their
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.
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