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Some people think the government should pay for health care and education, but other people claim that it is the individual‘s responsibility. Do you agree or disagree?

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Healthcare and
education
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 are integral to the concept of social equality which governments strive to achieve. While some believe that these are fundamental rights of
citizens
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 and should be provided for by the governments, others view these as personal liabilities to be taken care
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by the individuals themselves. I strongly favour the former view and provide support for my opinion in
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, the availability of efficient and timely medical assistance is key to healthy people and healthy societies. If
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 service is not provided as a public service, and
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 one has to spend for it, it would result in non-uniform medical coverage of population depending upon their economic situation, which means rich people will easily afford life-saving treatments and poor, disabled and old
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 will be at the disadvantageous end of the bargain resulting in unequal societies favouring its richer folks.
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, medical services should be considered as fundamental civil services to be sponsored by the government.
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, if
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 is to be taken care
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by individuals
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 chances of
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 service getting commercialized for benefits increase manifolds and again odds get stacked against the lower-income population.
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, well-off
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 will get access to good schooling on the basis of funding and not-so-well doing folks will be deprived of it and will stay at the bottom of the economic ladder due to lack of it, thereby promoting more inequality in the society.
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, like healthcare,
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 should
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 be counted as a basic privilege to be provided by the government. To sum up, both
education
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 and healthcare are basic citizen rights and governments should be responsible for providing these services to their
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.
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