Some people say that education system is the only critical factor to the development of a country. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?

There are people who would say that
education
is the main aspect when focusing on developing a country.
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, there are
also
different tackles which could be considered to aid societies development.
Education
is known as the key factor to aid society's needs, rather it
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on combating viruses or creating new technologies to empower humans conditions to
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defend
defiant
defeat
humans's
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wellbeing.
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there are several
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aspects that could contribute to
trive
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thrive
drive
nations around the world. In fact,
education
brings people a
differenciation
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differentiation
on dealing with issues in which demand mental capability with
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knowledge or theoretical methods.
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, there are numerous health concerns
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necessary to be
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specialist
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therefore
knowing what is the threat,
this
might be on developing new drugs to treat people suffering from harmful
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diseases
or to create a modern wheelchair to a
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person. In fact
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the idea of
education
is the most important factor to empower nations, can be
resonably
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reasonably
justified, but these days many individuals without
further
education
have
also
helped to tackle issues aro
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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