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There are many benefits for young people who travel to other countries. Do you agree or disagree?

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There has been a remarkable increase in the number of people going to different parts of the world for a journal. From my point of view,
this
 habit brings about numerous benefits for individuals
such
 as enhancing their foreign language or widen their horizons. In
this
 essay, I will go about some reasons why I have propounded
this
 thought about
this
 topic before reach a certain conclusion.
To begin
 with, there are more than a hundred countries in the world, which means there are lots of languages. Once a university student, who grow up without learned
English
 as a
second
 language, went abroad for a month or more
then
 he will expose
English
 conversations.
Therefore
, if he wants to apply for a job after his graduation he can add the qualification in his CV as I know the
English
 language.
For example
, according to research conducted by a famous university named Harward employers have a prerequisite as a candidate is able to speak
English
 fluently or write an academic article as if native.
On the other hand
, if a youth live without seeing another place in the world
then
 his
verizon
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 of think can be restricted automatically. We can clearly see that every teenager is not the same because of some reason like maturing in just one places while his contemporaries travelling on lots of countries.
As a result
 of these circumstances, having an experience as seeing more than one region can help to widen juvenile person’s horizon.
For instance
, when my cousin, living in America came to our hometown I can undoubtedly realize that there are lots of American’s features which can help me not be ignorant. In light of
this
 information mentioned above, it can be clearly said that if a young person has a chance to go abroad,
this
 should be carried out immediately.
Otherwise
, a crucial opportunity for their career in the future might have been missed.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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