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In some countries, some criminal trials are shown on the television and the general public can watch them. Do you think the advantages of this outweigh the disadvantages

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One of the most controversial issues in recent years is that some criminal trials are popular on social media,
therefore
, people, including children could watch them. Personally, I myself believe that
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erits of
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 matter outweigh drawbacks.
This
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first
 hand, it is undeniable that criminal judgements could present the quality of the government.
In other words
, it is aimed to do not only show national laws but
also
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 power. Taking Russia for
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 example. Thanks to the flawless law, the criminal rate of Russia is one of the lowest all around the world.
Moreover
, the national-wide social media of criminal trials is likely to educate the young generations,
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especially
 youngsters who are in the rebellion age. Children could behave much better and become nice citizens of
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society.
On the other hand
, showing criminal trials on general media has its own drawbacks. One of the major disadvantages is that lawbreakers could improve and enhance their skills. What I mean by
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 that the criminals could find out some underhand ways to protect them from sentences.
For instance
, in some murder case records, the murderers used fake historical mental illness to escape from being imprisoned.
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, the ability of lawbreakers
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 better in upcoming years, which creates higher pressure
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 the law protectors. In conclusion,
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 it is definite that there are still some disadvantages
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this
 issue, criminal judgements should be presented for the residents because of valuable benefits.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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