Nowadays, more and more people decide to have children later in their life. What are the reasons? What are the effects on society and family life?

Over the
last
decade, many people are not willing to have
children
in
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early years of their marriage.
This
essay will discuss some factors which are contributed to
this
tendency and examine its consequences on society as well as family life. The main reason that couples decide not to have a baby is that they like to enjoy their life and postpone all the heavy responsibilities associated with being a parent to the later time. They can obviously travel easier and explore more exciting places without a baby,
for instance
. The other reason is that most young couples are experiencing the early stages of their career, so they have lots of motivation to promote their job position. It is clear that having a child will probably limit their ambitious for better job prospects. Take a
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for example
, the ability for
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traveling
counts as an asset, whereas being a parent makes it difficult to have regular business trips.
However
,
this
tendency has some negative effects on both families and societies.
Firstly
, having
children
later will cause a significant age gap between
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t
wo generations.
This
makes it harder for parents to understand and communicate with their
children
. Not only
this
, there are many scientific articles that prove baby delivery at ages higher than forty may impose a serious mental and physical health risk on both parent and newborn.
This
might adversely affect the quality of the future workforce. To conclude, It is evident that there are several causes of disinterest in having
children
among young couples, and some negative effects. Society must make sure steps are taken to balance
this
situation,
otherwise
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serious problems will occur for both families and societies.

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To get an excellent score in the IELTS Task 2 writing section, one of the easiest and most effective tips is structuring your writing in the most solid format. A great argument essay structure may be divided to four paragraphs, in which comprises of four sentences (excluding the conclusion paragraph, which comprises of three sentences).

For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

Our recommended essay structure above comprises of fifteen (15) sentences, which will make your essay approximately 250 to 275 words.

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