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Nowadays, more and more people decide to have children later in their life. What are the reasons? What are the effects on society and family life?

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Over the
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 decade, many people are unwilling to have
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 in the early years of their marriage.
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 essay will discuss some factors that contribute to
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 tendency and examine its consequences on society and family life. The main reason that couples decide not to have a baby is that they like to enjoy their life and postpone all the heavy responsibilities associated with being a parent later. They can travel more comfortably and explore more exciting places without a baby,
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. The other reason is that most young couples are experiencing the early stages of their career, so they have lots of motivation to promote their job position. Having a child will probably limit their ambition for better job prospects. Take a salesperson,
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; travelling counts as an asset, whereas being a parent makes it difficult to have regular business trips.
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,
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 tendency has some adverse effects on both families and societies.
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, having
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 later will cause a significant age gap between the two generations.
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 makes it harder for parents to understand and communicate with their
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. Not only
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, many scientific articles prove baby delivery at ages higher than forty may impose a severe mental and physical health risk on both parent and newborn.
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 might adversely affect the quality of the future workforce. To conclude, It is evident that there are several causes of disinterest in having
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 among young couples and some adverse effects. Society must make sure steps are taken to balance
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 situation;
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, serious problems will occur for both families and societies.
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