Some experts believe that it is better for children to begin learning a foreign language at primary schools rather than secondary school. Do the advantages of this outweigh the disadvantages?

A highly controversial issue today relates to
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whether

The word wether doesn’t seem to fit this context. Consider replacing it with a different one.

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wether
pupils should be learning a new
language
in primary
school
instead
of
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secondary
Sunday

The word secunday is not in our dictionary. If you’re sure this spelling is correct, you can add it to your personal dictionary to prevent future alerts.

secunday
school
. In
this
essay, I am going to examine
this
question from both
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points

The singular countable noun point follows the quantifier both, which requires a plural noun. Consider using a plural noun or a different quantifier.

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point
of views and give my opinion on the matter. one side of the argument there are people who argue that the benefits of learning a
language
in primary
school
considerably outweigh its disadvantages.The main reason for believing
this
is that pupils are more receptive to learn a new
language
.Children in primary
school
are learning from the beginning
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therefore

The word thefore is not in our dictionary. If you’re sure this spelling is correct, you can add it to your personal dictionary to prevent future alerts.

thefore
a new
language
can be for them another subject, It will make it
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easy

The word esay is not in our dictionary. If you’re sure this spelling is correct, you can add it to your personal dictionary to prevent future alerts.

esay
to understand. It
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is
was

Your sentence appears to be missing a verb.

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also
possible to say that they can see a new
language
as a game.One good illustration for
this
is more often the children begin learning a
language
with songs
such
as vowels and numbers song.
on the other hand
, it is
also
possible to make the opposing case.It
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is often argued

It appears that the form of the verb argue does not work with is in this sentence.

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is often argue
that the fact it can be easier for
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secondary

The word secundary is not in our dictionary. If you’re sure this spelling is correct, you can add it to your personal dictionary to prevent future alerts.

secundary
students to learn a foreign
language
,
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professionals

The word profesionals is not in our dictionary. If you’re sure this spelling is correct, you can add it to your personal dictionary to prevent future alerts.

profesionals
have
this
opinion because a student from
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secondary

The word secundary is not in our dictionary. If you’re sure this spelling is correct, you can add it to your personal dictionary to prevent future alerts.

secundary
school
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has

The plural verb have does not appear to agree with the singular subject student. Consider changing the verb form for subject-verb agreement.

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have
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knowledge

The word knoledge is not in our dictionary. If you’re sure this spelling is correct, you can add it to your personal dictionary to prevent future alerts.

knoledge
to understand the
language
and make their own comparisons in order to
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connect

The word conect is not in our dictionary. If you’re sure this spelling is correct, you can add it to your personal dictionary to prevent future alerts.

conect
both languages.A
second
point is that young students can be interested in learning a new
language
, that helps to be motivated.A
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particularly

It appears that the adjective particular is attempting to modify the adjective good. Consider replacing it with an adverb.

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particular
good example here is it many students are thinking in the future, and it becoming
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a

The noun phrase trend seems to be missing a determiner before it. Consider adding an article.

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t
rend to speak more than one
language
. In conclusion, I believe that both
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arguments
argument

The word argumet is not in our dictionary. If you’re sure this spelling is correct, you can add it to your personal dictionary to prevent future alerts.

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have their merits.On balance, I feel that learning a
language
in primary
school
benefits the pupils.
This
is because they are more open to
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learning

The verb learn may be in the wrong form after the preposition to. Consider changing it to the gerund form.

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learn
.

Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately

Linking words are very important in your essay.

To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.

Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.

In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.

Linking word examples:

  • firstly
  • secondly
  • thirdly
  • in additional
  • moreover
  • also
  • for example
  • for instance
  • therefore
  • however
  • although
  • even though
  • despite

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