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Animals are in danger of extinction. Some people say that we should protect only those animals which are useful to humans. Do you agree or disagree?

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In
this
 century, many species of
animals
 will not be founded after one decade. While some
people
 are of the belief that we should take an action to save only those
animals
 which give benefits to humans, others think humans should protect all
animals
 for the natural balance. I disagree with the idea
that is
 selective which
kind
 will save, and in my opinion, the protection should be for all kinds of
animals
 because any animal on the Earth has its benefit. I will discuss
this
 point of view in
this
 essay.
To begin
 with,
people
 who think we should select which
kind
 will protect and which one uses to humans are focusing in short term; they believe other kinds of
animals
 just created for no reason.
For instance
, according to environment article I read which said that many countries
such
 as China tried to kill one
kind
 of insects and after that, they surprised of the benefit of
this
kind
 of insect.
Thus
,
this
 point of view on the wrong side because all species of
animals
 will be useful to Earth's environment. On the other side, in my opinion,
that is
 right when
people
 think we should protect all
animals
 and provide them with the proper facilities for the quality of life. a lot of
animals
' right communities, as a prime example, they try to expand the awareness about these issues by making advertisements and collaborate with celebrities.
Therefore
, all
animals
 much important to save the environment's balance. In conclusion, I am of the belief that all kinds of
animals
 have Its benefit and we should protect them.
Also
, I disagree with
this
 view of
people
 who say that we should protect only
animals
 provide us with benefits.
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