Write a letter to your friend inviting him/her to a music concert. Please say - where and when the concert is going to be, - what type of music will be played there, - and why your friend will enjoy it

Dear Neha, I hope

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letter finds you well! I wanted to share some exciting news with you. Diljit Dosanjh is performing live music in our city, and I've got an extra ticket with your name on it. The concert is happening on June 7th at the Maple Arena, which is just a short drive from both our places. The show starts at 7.00 pm but I think we should get there a bit earlier to soak in the atmosphere and grab some food. As you know Diljit Dosanjh is famous for his energetic performances and incredible voice. He'll be singing all our favourite songs from his classic

bangra

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bhangra

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to his latest chart-toppers. It's going to be a mix of bhangra beats, soulful melodies and those tunes and catchy vibes we can't stop dancing to. I'm sure you'll love it because it's not just about the music. The crowd, the vibe and Diljit Dosanjh's amazing stage performance will make it an unforgettable experience. Plus, it's a great opportunity to catch up and have a fantastic night out. Please let me know ASAP if you're in so I can confirm the seats. Can't wait to hear back from you. Cheers, Amanjot Kaur

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coherence and cohesion

Make sure each paragraph focuses on one main idea more clearly.

task achievement

Consider adding a little more detail about why the concert experience is special.

positive

The invitation is warm and friendly, which sets a nice tone.

Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately

Linking words are very important in your essay.

To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.

Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.

In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.

Linking word examples:

firstly
secondly
thirdly
in additional
moreover
also
for example
for instance
therefore
however
although
even though
despite

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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 4.0

Logical structure

Single idea per paragraph

Greeting and closing

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 8.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 8.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 7.0

Complete response

Suitable writing tone

Appropriate word count

8 paragraphs

201 words

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Write a letter to your friend inviting him/her to a music concert. Please say - where and when the concert is going to be, - what type of music will be played there, - and why your friend will enjoy it

Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately

The world today is a safer place than it was a hundred years ago, and governments should stop spending large amounts of money on their armed forces. To what extend do you agree or disagree with this statement?

Most modern families have both parents working and as a result children spend less and less time with their parents. What is the reason for this? What problems can this cause?

E-mail has had a huge impact on professional and social communication but this impact has been negative as well as positive. Do the disadvantages of using e-mail outweigh the advantages?

Today people are surrounded by advertising. This affects what people think is important and has a negative impact on people's lives. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

You are working at home and have a problem with be shap equipment that you use for your job at a letter to the shop or company which applied the equipment in your letter describe the problem with equipment explain how this problem affecting you say what you want the shop or company to do