In some areas of the US, a curfew is imposed, in which teenagers are not allowed to be out of doors after a particular time at night unless they are accompanied by an adult. What is your opinion about this ?.

In some regions of America, a curfew seems to be imposed
although
it has not been imposed in Japan for many years. There should be from background to impose a curfew and
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ros and cons about it.
First
of all, curfews may not be imposed in safe areas. Safe areas mean that the crime rate is low. If teenagers go out at night in the area
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which there are many
crimes
happening, they would be involved and be in danger. Because they do not know how to protect themselves from possible dangers of
crimes
.
Also
, it is possible that teens might commit
crimes
due to the fact they are curious about everything and they are easily
inolved
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involved
to their friends.
In addition
, high crime late sometimes means that parents interest
aboug
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about
edution
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education
is low.
Therefore
children
get interested in
crimes
, drugs, rapes, robberies
instead
of studying.
Consequently
,
children
will not get good jobs and will become poor,
then
will commit
crimes
. So, bad sequences will be repeated. In
such
situations, it may be necessary to impose a curfew.
However
, there may be
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opinion that a
cufew
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curfew
should not be imposed.
Becuase
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Because
it is not
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ood idea to restrict
children
's action and
children
's freedom should be respected
instead
. I agree with
this
idea to some extent. If a teen is less than 15 years old, they should not be outside after 9 o'clock.
However
, teens over 15 years old can understand what is wrong. In conclusion, in
a dangerous area teenagers
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dangerous area teenagers
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might be restricted to go out at night,
however
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ages over 15 can be exempted. What is
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the
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ore important thing is to educate people including
pearents
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parents
.
Otherwise
, situations will not change.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • enforce
  • juvenile
  • repercussions
  • autonomy
  • adolescence
  • paternalistic
  • delinquency
  • municipality
  • ordinance
  • authoritarian
  • peer pressure
  • social dynamics
  • civil liberties
  • community policing
  • preventative measures
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