In some areas of the US, a curfew is imposed, in which teenagers are not allowed to be out of doors after a particular time at night unless they are accompanied by an adult. What is your opinion about this ?.

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In some regions of America, a curfew seems to be imposed
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it has not
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been imposed
in Japan for many years. There should be from background to impose
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a curfew
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essay will discuss the pros and cons of it.  
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of all,
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curfews may
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not be imposed in safe areas. Safe areas mean that the crime rate is low.If teenagers go out at night in an area in which there are many
crimes
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happening,they would be involved and be in danger. Because they do not know how to
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protect themselves
from the possible dangers of
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.
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, it is possible that
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teens might
commit
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due to the fact they are curious about everything and
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they are
they're
easily involved with their friends.
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, the high crime rate
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sometimes means
that parent's interest in education is low.
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children
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get interested
in
crimes
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, drugs, rapes, robberies
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of studying.
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,
children
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will not get good jobs and will become poor,
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willcommit
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will commit
crimes
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. So, bad sequences will be repeated. In
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situations, it
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may be
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necessary to impose a curfew.  
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, there may
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be an
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opinion that a curfew should not be imposed. Because it is not a good idea
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to restrict
children
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's actions and
children
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's freedom should be respected
instead
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.I agree with
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idea to some extent. If a teen is less than 15 years old,they should not be outside after 9 o'clock.
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, teens over 15 years
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old can
understand what is wrong.  In conclusion, in dangerous areas teenagers might be restricted to go out at night,
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,
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ages over
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15 can be exempted. What is a more important thing is to educate
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people including
people-including
parents.
Otherwise
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, situations will not change.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • enforce
  • juvenile
  • repercussions
  • autonomy
  • adolescence
  • paternalistic
  • delinquency
  • municipality
  • ordinance
  • authoritarian
  • peer pressure
  • social dynamics
  • civil liberties
  • community policing
  • preventative measures
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