People attend colleges or universities for many different reasons (for example, new experiences, career preparation, increased knowledge etc.). Why do you think people attend colleges or universities?

Most
people
choose to
study
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university because they want to get a decent job. Of course,
people
should
study
what interest them.
However
, it is difficult for everyone to achieve their dream, as reality can be cruel.
Therefore
, the government must keep improving the education system so that young
people
can pursue what they love. It is often said that the purpose of education is for young
people
to cultivate their talents. If a person has a gift for the piano, he should be allowed to pursue a degree in
music
. Majoring in
music
can give
this
young man a chance to not only learn from great professors
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,
but
also
establish a solid foundation for his
music
.
However
, not all pianists can play the piano for a living. If his country is still struggling financially, there will be very few chances for him to perform in a concert, or to work as a pianist in a company. It is not uncommon that, even if a young child shows a talent in
music
or art, his parents will force him to
study
engineering or medicine. In many countries,
such
as Taiwan, white-collar jobs have become the norm. These jobs require at least an undergraduate degree, making a university degree almost necessary for survival. I,
for instance
, love literature. When I was choosing my future
study
,
however
, my parents strongly disagreed with my decision to
study
literature. They believed that reading novels and poetry is never going to help me buy a house or even have a life. I was
therefore
compelled to choose a major in finance. But when I was in my freshman year, I found that the school was cooperating with the government to help students from all majors to find jobs. Literature, I realized, can have different possibilities. So, I transferred myself in the
second
year. Now I am still working hard to prepare myself for the future, but I can do what I love. The future of the countries relies on these young
people
. If they only attend universities because, just it is the norm in
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the
society, but without other reasons, everyone will be just like a robot to work for a living.
Therefore
, the government should put more effort
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on
education to inspire young
people
’s talent and lead them
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to
the right direction of life.
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