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Nowadays we are producing more and more rubbish. Why do you think this is happening? What can governments do to help reduce the amount of rubbish produced? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

#rubbish #governments #amount
Following the population increase,
rubbish
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been
 being
createding
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creating
created
 much more than before. Of course,
people
 should concern be concerned with what they have done to
this
 beautiful
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Earth
.
However
, it is hard to make everyone implement
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reducing reduce
rubbish
.
Therefore
, the government must impose laws to restrict the quantity of created
rubbish
. The concept of reducing
rubbish
 and recycling should be taught to
people
 when they are young. In Taiwan, it is common to see teachers teaching children how to separate the normal
rubbish
 and recyclable
rubbish
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 and
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one
also
 of the approaches is for the children too they teach children to squeeze the
containers
 to make them smaller.
However
, it is not uncommon that, even everyone knows how to deal with the
rubbish
, they still create them much every day. Especially in the developed countries, take away and delivery systems have been developing, and modern
people
 rely much on them
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 because
people
 are too busy to prepare their own
food
 or drink. It is common to see how many
people
 just go to restaurants or order
food
 on smartphone
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applications delivery
application delivery
 applications, and they can get the
food
 which is packed in plastic
containers
 that will lead to even more
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rubbish in
rubbish
 20 to 30 minutes. In many countries,
such
 as Taiwan, the government has been imposing laws demanding that supermarkets, convenience stores, restaurants and drink
shops
 should
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not provide the plastic bags, disposable tableware, and plastic straws. So that
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people
 will have to bring their own bags when they go shopping; bring, their own
containers
 when they take away
food
 from restaurants
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 bring or their own straws and bottles when they go to coffee
shops
 and drink
shops
. Following
this
 law and promoting their business,
For instance
,
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many
shops
 implement would
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 events
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where that
, if consumers bring their own
containers
 or bottles, they can get discounts for one or two new Taiwan dollarsNTD., and
also
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this
 concept is
therefore
 getting
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 deeply rooted in the Taiwanese’s mind, making the law an effective way to reduce
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ubbish. . It is an effective way to reduce
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ubbish. It is undeniable that
rubbish
 has been increasing due to
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opulation explosion.
However
, there are still some ways to improve
this
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circumstance although
 education seems to be helping, the law is much more effective.
Therefore
, the government should restrict the quantity of
rubbish
 severely which everyone has made in order to return the ordinal beautiful the earth to its original beauty.
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