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People attend colleges or universities for many different reasons (for example, new experiences, career preparation, increased knowledge etc.). Why do you think people attend colleges or universities?

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In modern society, education has become a fundamental condition for all country. In terms of attending universities,
people
 have different requirement to enrol it. In
this
 case, I will give my opinions for why
people
 want to study in
this
 sort of organizations. It is believed that gaining a higher degree can help those students to have better job opportunities in the future. There are some professionals that require to learn deeply on certain academical education. If they do not complete it fully so that they might not qualified to get the entry ticket for a famous company. Take an example of Google company, being a member of the engineer in Google company that employee should have graduated from the university or master degree. It is clear that many students would like to get the qualification from academic institutions in order to gain a good career. It is believed that attending colleges not only can increase academic knowledge but
also
 improve their social
status
. Nowadays, many governments provide a completed educational system for their citizens from primary school to high school. When most citizens have at least graduated from high
schoo
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school
. It is important for individuals if they can continue to attend a higher educational institution that can improve their personal value in
this
 competitive society. From the social
status
 perspective,
People
 who have completed an undergraduate level would gain more respect from
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ommunity. 
Therefore
, there are more and more
people
 believed that graduated from the university is necessary because it not only to increase the job opportunities but
also
 to upper their social
status
. In conclusion,
people
 have a different view to gain their academic qualification. It is undeniable that most
people
 attend to the university because they would like to gain a great career and increase their social
status
.
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