Some people say that in all levels of education, from primary schools to universities, too much time is spent on learning facts and not enough on learning practical skill. Do you agree or disagree?

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There is currently a contentious argument over whether the educational system
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time by teaching theoretical
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there is a shortage of practice skills. I totally agree with
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opinion since most of them are unnecessary for
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development and it can decrease their attention along the course. The main reason why I believe that learning institutions are focusing on irrelevant
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is that they are usually unnecessary for
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development.
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is because they are not going to use most part of
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content in the future, which can cost too much money for a country to
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, these
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can be time-consuming when it comes to preparing
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the years to come.
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, if a student chooses to be a doctor, it would be a complete waste of time
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used to learn physics at school. A second notion is that wasting energy
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useless
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can lead pupils to lack
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attention. It is known
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hardly impossible to learn something when a person is not interested, which
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any type of
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ranging from maths to languages;
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, it is worth for institutions to invest
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pupils' development
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skills in order to keep their attention along the course which can bring about a better future for them. To illustrate, most of the
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are running short of money, which means that if the school teaches them how to work as
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carpenter they could find jobs that could lead them to make money,
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a consequence, they would be interested in
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. In conclusion, I totally agree that it is spent
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much time on the useless
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at schools since they can harm the
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students
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future by making them feel uncomfortable attending
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. It seems that the only option is
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learning
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to keep updated about new ways of teaching which include practical skills.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • education system
  • curriculum
  • factual knowledge
  • practical skills
  • critical thinking
  • problem solving
  • academic achievement
  • real-world application
  • balance
  • integration
  • learning outcomes
  • employment opportunities
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