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Shops should give preference in selling local food rather than imported food. Do you agree or disagree?

#shops #food
Markets provide
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mportance of encashing specific eating
substances
 than purchasing swallow goods by
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uman. From my perspective,
this
 proposition is completely true. It seems undeniable that shops should be the place where everything is available.
Food
 is the human fundamental
substances
 where they can survive by eating it. As a consequence, a man must buy any kinds of
food
 from
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hop. The significant aspects
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 that it must be from his
area
. The quality of
food
 is good if he purchases it from local. There is no guarantee to buy imported
food
.
Thus
, purchasing eating
substances
 from one's
area
 is better to fetch any outside
food
 from another region.
However
, some individuals consider that imported
food
 has a good storage facility which is not available in the local eating
substances
.
For instance
, a raw fish is bought from somebody's nearest river or pond and there is a lot of possibilities to get healthy components in it.
Nevertheless
, other
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this
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 imported fishes have a good preservation quality.
Moreover
, foods from
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ocal region contain
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good quality of vitamins, minerals etcetera.
As a result
, it can provide an ensured of good health of the specific
area
.
Firstly
, it is measured to that folk who are still living
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that
area
.
Secondly
, it would be verified that type of persons who have a magnificent experience of
this
.
On the other hand
, some individuals argue that local
food
 cannot provide the specimen advantage all the time. It is because it has no variation.
Also
, imported
food
 can contain
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diversity in the component which would be
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fruitful to the folks.
For example
, catching fish from one's
area
 of river or pond has good
substances
 and it is useful for health.
Nevertheless
, some individuals suppose that it would be
also
 good if is fetched from
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oreign country because it contains a lot of calcium which is drastically needed for any human. In conclusion, vending local
food
 is benefited for all
however
food
 imported from
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oreign country has a good aspect to keep good health conditions of people.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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