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Advances in technology and automation have reduced the need for manual labor. Therefore, working hours should be reduced. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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There has been an extensive revolution in the field of
technology
 and
this
 is decreasing the demand for unskilled human
labor
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. In effect, there's should be shortened duration of working hours. It seems to me that
this
 will be beneficial and I totally agree with its implementation and my reasons will be highlighted in
this
 essay.
To begin
 with, I believe that people should benefit from technological advances by creating a
work
-life balance.
This
 is because
technology
 is meant to make life and
work
 easier for man and not serve as
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urden.
For example
, when working hours reduce, people can spend more time with their families and friends.
Furthermore
, They can
also
 pay more attention to their health and overall well-being.
Also
, when individuals
work
 less, they can build on personal development and
work
 qualifications improving their knowledge base and skills which
consequently
, can
improves
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 the affairs of the company they
work
. Admittedly, it can be said that
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hortened duration of
work
 hours can translate into reduced income for employees which can affect the individual and their families.
Furthermore
, young professionals with lower qualifications and experience might face difficulties while searching for jobs in a company with
work
 processes.
However
, I believe sole reliance on machines seems unrealistic and
technology
 has to be supervised. In conclusion, the advancement in
technology
 and automation is more advantageous ranging from
work
-life balance, better health and qualifications. Meanwhile,exclusive dependence on machines is unfeasible.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • technological advancements
  • automation
  • efficiency
  • productivity
  • manual tasks
  • obsolete
  • labor surplus
  • work-life balance
  • mental health
  • well-being
  • economic challenges
  • reduced income
  • economic downturns
  • technological unemployment
  • re-skilling
  • displaced workers
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