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Space exploration costs tax payers’ an exorbitant amount of money each year. What are the advantages and disadvantages of spending money on space exploration?

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Issues related to
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 are discussed these days. It is argued that taxes have been unreasonably invested in exorbitant
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. Despite the fact that
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 trend has some advantages, I would argue that there are more disadvantages. The explanation will be shown in the following paragraph. On the one hand, there are several merits of
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exploration
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. The principal reason is that
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 can provide humanity with additional resources. Since, nowadays, many countries are facing the scarcity of their resources due to overpopulation.
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, the
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 may be a possible way to tackle
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 X, an American aerospace manufacturer, has a mission to MARS in order to colonise and explore other planet resources. An additional point is that universe study allows human to receive more information about our solar system and universe.
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, exploring  universe system can help people prepare to deal with any unexpectedly dangerous situations as well as save our race.
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, ozone levels data which involve in Global warming has been observed by NASA.
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, there are a number of demerits associated with galaxy study. The main reason is a hazardous adventure for human. To explain,
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 the current technology has been developed better than ever before,
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exploration
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 is still a rather risky project.
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, scientists and astronauts should be more time to
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 in order to reduce accidents. Another point is that
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 has a direct impact on air pollution.
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 means that huge amounts of fossil fuels are released in the production process of rockets as well as lunch a rocket into
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, people living surrounding these areas can lead to health problems;
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 as lung cancer. All things considered, It seems to me that the drawbacks of
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 significantly outweigh the benefits.
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, Governments and individuals should be more
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 as well as carefully realise the effects of
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 issue in their countries.

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