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Some people say that music is a good way of bringing people of different cultures and ages together. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion.

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In today's technology-driven
world
 where
people
 have interests in various fields,
music
 is the only art which unites them across generations overcoming geographical boundaries. In my opinion, I agree that all forms of
music
 irrespective of its origin and
language
 will bring
people
 together to celebrate and enjoy the notes just for the sheer beauty of it.
Firstly
, in the 1960s period
music
 was restricted to a particular region or country, and in fact to a certain culture. Unlike the current technology-driven period, in those days orchestrating a song needed manpower, and
also
 proper planning and organization.
Moreover
, there was not much choice left to release the song in another place. Another point to consider is that the internet is a boon to mankind, and owing to
this
 reason,
music
 has reached a wide range of audience all over the
world
. The newly released tracks,
for instance
, are available in the popular
music
 portals or mobile apps immediately, through which the users could subscribe or buy their favourite songs to listen. Artists from various parts of the
world
 travel to numerous places for giving concerts.
Finally
,
music
 has
also
 bridged the generation gap across the
world
. Nowadays old songs are being revived as remix songs and
people
 belonging to different age groups seem to enjoy it, despite the song being in another
language
.
In other words
, there is no linguistic barrier for
music
 lovers. In conclusion,
music
 in any form binds
people
 of all generations irrespective of the country they belong, the
language
 they speak and the varying lifestyle. In conclusion,
music
 in any form binds
people
 of all generations irrespective of the country they belong, the
language
 they speak and the varying lifestyle.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • universal language
  • evoke
  • connect
  • diverse audiences
  • cultural exchange
  • generational gaps
  • shared experiences
  • unifying force
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