Some people say that music is a good way of bringing people of different cultures and ages together. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion.

In today's technology-driven

world

where

people

have interests in various fields,

music

is the only art which unites them across generations overcoming geographical boundaries. In my opinion, I agree that all forms of

music

irrespective of its origin and

language

will bring

people

together to celebrate and enjoy the notes just for the sheer beauty of it.

Firstly

, in the 1960s period

music

was restricted to a particular region or country, and in fact to a certain culture. Unlike the current technology-driven period, in those days orchestrating a song needed manpower, and

also

proper planning and organization.

Moreover

, there was not much choice left to release the song in another place. Another point to consider is that the internet is a boon to mankind, and owing to

this

reason,

music

has reached a wide range of audience all over the

world

. The newly released tracks,

for instance

, are available in the popular

music

portals or mobile apps immediately, through which the users could subscribe or buy their favourite songs to listen. Artists from various parts of the

world

travel to numerous places for giving concerts.

Finally

music

has

also

bridged the generation gap across the

world

. Nowadays old songs are being revived as remix songs and

people

belonging to different age groups seem to enjoy it, despite the song being in another

language

In other words

, there is no linguistic barrier for

music

lovers. In conclusion,

music

in any form binds

people

of all generations irrespective of the country they belong, the

language

they speak and the varying lifestyle. In conclusion,

music

in any form binds

people

of all generations irrespective of the country they belong, the

language

they speak and the varying lifestyle.

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Topic Vocabulary:

universal language
evoke
connect
diverse audiences
cultural exchange
generational gaps
shared experiences
unifying force

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