We are becoming less influenced by advertising now than in the past. What are the reasons? Is it a positive or negative development?

The use of online sources brought more awareness in the public these days as compared to a decade ago,
while
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were so innocent and easily
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attracted to the product through the advert.
Moreover
, people are using product reviews and
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comments to make a choice whether to buy or not. In my opinion, it is a significantly positive amplification because an individual could save more just
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on necessities. The essay will analyse the aforementioned reason by using the examples and
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discuss, how it is a positive development. It is undeniable that folks are more active online than
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past time, so they are able to get all types of information about everything and not rely only on advertisements.
Additionally
, when a person wants to buy an item,
firstly
, they check consumer suggestions and opinions online in the review section and
then
they
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- up a selection.
On the other hand
in the past companies
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celebrities to endorse the brand and customers got
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by that strategy because they were not aware enough.
For example
, I bought a washing machine a few months ago, but I checked the comments and suggestions first about the machines and the company's customer service.
Thus
, it is the main reason for the decline in the influence of the advertisement on the audience.
However
, it should not be forgotten that, with
this
awareness, an individual could save more amount of money.
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, the crowd in the old decades followed the commercials about a specific commodity if they bought the wrong one they had to buy it over again and they
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more.
For instance
, when I was a child my father bought the same shower shop by
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following
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a popular advert on TV and did not get any better results but
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these days if we
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something and
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everything online. In conclusion, even though online awareness is a primary cause of a decrease in
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on the public. Despite that, it is a positive development because people become able to save more money and
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because they now know their basic needs and what to buy or not
due to
the trend.
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task response
The essay addresses the prompt adequately by discussing reasons for the decrease in influence of advertising and evaluating whether it is a positive or negative development. However, some points could be further elaborated to strengthen the argument.
coherence cohesion
The essay shows a basic structure with an introduction, body paragraphs, and a conclusion. However, there is room for improvement in connecting ideas more cohesively within and between paragraphs.

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