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Being celebrity-such as a famous film star or sports personality-brings problem as well as benefits. Do you think that being a celebrity has more benefits or more problems?

In
this
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 modern world, some have argued that having a
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 status results in both serious challenges and advantages. I strongly believe that being a famous person lays a strong foundation for personal and professional development.
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, there are certain issues,
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 as a lack of privacy
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 can be controlled. One of the major benefits of
celebrity
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 status is that it opens countless doors to unique opportunities, which can transform a person's
life
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.
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, it enables
individuals
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 to earn a higher income from various activities, especially through advertisements and endorsements, even enabling them to make significant contributions to charities by attracting donors, providing funds, and helping to build hospitals. As a salient example, Ali Dayi, a famous football player in Iran, whose achievements are not limited to sports
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has devoted time to helping the poor, victims of natural disasters, and talented young athletes.
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, being a
celebrity
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 allows
individuals
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 to make a positive social impact in their communities.
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, there exist some issues, leading to a loss of balance between personal and professional lives, including pressure from media and fans, loss of privacy, and even threats, all of which can potentially harm a
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's
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.
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, Azadeh Namdar, a well-known broadcaster on Iranian television, lost her career after private photographs from a trip were leaked, and the resulting media pressure severely affected her mental health.
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,
this
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 type of
life
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 poses more challenges, affecting
individuals
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' daily routines and offering more stressful lives.
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, in my opinion, being among reputed
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 can create more chances for advancement
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Nevertheless
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, some challenges can prevent a comfortable
life
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, but they can be controlled with good management and strong support systems.

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structure
Plan your essay more. Say your view in the first part and restate it in the end.
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Give more exact examples with date or facts to show you know the issue.
grammar
Use short, clear sentences. Check punctuation to avoid long lines.
content
The essay shows both sides of the issue.
argument
The writer has a clear view.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • celebrity
  • fame
  • benefit
  • problem
  • privacy
  • pressure
  • stress
  • scrutiny
  • money
  • wealth
  • career
  • opportunity
  • influence
  • platform
  • fans
  • public
  • media
  • health
  • safety
  • family
  • friends
  • work
  • travel
  • role model
  • responsibility
  • control
  • loneliness
  • support
  • lesson
  • balance
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