It is suggested that all the young adults should undertake a period of unpaid work helping people in the community. Does it bring more benefits or drawbacks to the community and the young people?

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It is said that youngsters should participate in any volunteer
work
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just to help other
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who are in need of it.To my mind
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unpaid
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has more pros than cons and I will provide appropriate arguments for
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work
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.
People
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who are involved in volunteer
work
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are so valuable and worthwhile in the world.
Firstly
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, these
people
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are striving to assist other
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every day who can’t do it due to some life circumstances. Many international companies value
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with
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type of
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without extra charge. If
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gain
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experience, they will have more benefits and perks in their long run.
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,
people
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can get useful knowledge and
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irst experience in
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area, where they
work
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and eventually that will understand better
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business and weigh up pros and cons according to climbing on the career ladder in
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type of business.
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, in 2020 about 47% of Ukrainian young
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have started their career from scratch in IT companies without any experience and immersed themselves in the duties of
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position, and understood all approaches and principles of
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type of job. The major drawback of
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unpaid activity is that
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don’t receive
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remuneration within a long period of time.They can be demoralized and upset about it.
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, they may suffer
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because they need to take their head above the water. They can’t splurge on many things
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why before
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an offer to
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proposal
people
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need to accumulate some money for their living.
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, a plethora of Ukrainian
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tend
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to end up their unpaid job after one month because they rely on getting their salary in the
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month. In conclusion, as we can see
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issue has more upsides than downsides by cause of it can take several months to do
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work
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. I reckon it will be beneficial for
people
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's prospects in their future life. (320 words)
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • skill development
  • soft skills
  • teamwork
  • communication
  • leadership
  • social responsibility
  • community engagement
  • empathy
  • civic duty
  • networking opportunities
  • volunteering
  • personal growth
  • confidence
  • financial compensation
  • economic drawbacks
  • exploitation
  • free labor
  • fair exchange
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