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It is suggested that all the young adults should undertake a period of unpaid work helping people in the community. Does it bring more benefits or drawbacks to the community and the young people?

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It is said that youngsters should participate in any volunteer
work
 just to help other
people
 who are in need of it.To my mind
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this
 unpaid
work
 has more pros than cons and I will provide appropriate arguments for
this
work
.
People
 who are involved in volunteer
work
 are so valuable and worthwhile in the world.
Firstly
, these
people
 are striving to assist other
people
 every day who can’t do it due to some life circumstances. Many international companies value
people
 with
this
 type of
work
 without extra charge. If
people
 gain
this
 experience, they will have more benefits and perks in their long run.
Secondly
,
people
 can get useful knowledge and
f
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irst experience in
this
 area, where they
work
 and eventually that will understand better
this
 business and weigh up pros and cons according to climbing on the career ladder in
this
 type of business.
For instance
, in 2020 about 47% of Ukrainian young
people
 have started their career from scratch in IT companies without any experience and immersed themselves in the duties of
this
 position, and understood all approaches and principles of
this
 type of job. The major drawback of
this
 unpaid activity is that
people
 don’t receive
a
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remuneration within a long period of time.They can be demoralized and upset about it.
Besides
, they may suffer
some time
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 because they need to take their head above the water. They can’t splurge on many things
that is
 why before
taking
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making
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 an offer to
this
 proposal
people
 need to accumulate some money for their living.
For example
, a plethora of Ukrainian
people
tend
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 to end up their unpaid job after one month because they rely on getting their salary in the
second
 month. In conclusion, as we can see
this
 issue has more upsides than downsides by cause of it can take several months to do
this
work
. I reckon it will be beneficial for
people
's prospects in their future life. (320 words)
Submitted by mila.kniaz on

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • skill development
  • soft skills
  • teamwork
  • communication
  • leadership
  • social responsibility
  • community engagement
  • empathy
  • civic duty
  • networking opportunities
  • volunteering
  • personal growth
  • confidence
  • financial compensation
  • economic drawbacks
  • exploitation
  • free labor
  • fair exchange
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