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The use of social media is replacing face-to-face interaction among many people in society. Do you think the advantages outweigh the disadvantages?

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Social
Media
 is increasingly popular in
today
's society
as a result
 of advances in technology. Many people argued that it has taken over in-person interaction, while others think
otherwise
. In my opinion, I believe that the advantages do outweigh the disadvantages.
This
 essay will discuss the reasons why and it will
further
 elaborate on it.
Although
 face-to-face interaction still very much exists
today
, it slowly wanes due to the increase in social
media
 usage and the ready availability of internet communications. People turned to computer networking because it is faster and more convenient to communicate with loved ones or businesswise.
For example
, parents are happier
today
 because they can contact their children overseas every day if needed to check upon them.
On the other hand
, internet usage can be problematic and can lead to addiction, social isolation, and fewer interactions, even among family members who are residing in the same home.
For instance
, I have seen it at home, as well as other family members. Children and even adult skipped their meals and spend most of their time on different platforms of networking
such
 as Facebook and Twitter. The addiction habit can disrupt other activities, while at the same time can lead to mental health problems.
Although
 negative outcomes of social
media
 are obvious, the benefits still prove greater because it is more convenient and reliable for communications especially in distance or more urgent matters. In conclusion, while social
media
 is slowly replacing face-to-face interaction in the world
today
, I believe that positive outcomes in terms of communications outweigh the addiction habit of individuals.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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