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Some people are of the opinion that people are naturally born as a leader while others feel that leadership skills can be learned. Discuss both view and give your opinion

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 it is believed by some that leaders are naturally born, others think that leadership
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 ought to be taught in order to be an excellent
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. In my opinion, I consider that the ability to think, act and lead a group of people has to be cultivated right from a young age. On the one hand, it is often believed that some people are naturally good at leading and have tremendous ownership
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.
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, a few of them tend to exhibit excellent speaking
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,
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 analyse and act upon an issue, and strive all the way to the end to find a solution. Swami Vivekananda,
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, was a bright child right from his childhood days
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 and is a
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 who had thousands of followers for his ideologies and principles.
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, it is quite easy to identify children who have the ability to lead a group, and they shine later in life as successful leaders.
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, some think that leadership
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 have to be cultivated and in turn can be learnt by proper training. Schools and teachers play a quintessential role in shaping a child's behaviour and character.
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, children with extraordinary communication
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 ought to be identified, trained how to own up things and encouraged to become a successful
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. Another reason why they should be trained is that
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 a bright
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 leads not only his family,
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, is capable of leading an entire nation to a whole new height. In conclusion, while people may vary in their opinions, I strongly stress that leadership
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 can be imbibed from quite a young age and any brilliant kid would become a
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 at a later point in life.
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