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Information technology is changing many aspects of our lives and now dominates our home, leisure and work activities. To what extent do the benefits of information technology outweigh the disadvantages?

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The advancement of
technology
 has created a transformational change in every part of people's
life
;
thus
 it is increasingly controlling
thier
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their
 personal and working
life
.
This
 essay entirely agrees that the advantage of
information
technology
 outweighs its drawback. The greatest benefit of
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nternet is facilitating the
life
 of humans in all aspect of their
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daily
life
. It has made it
more
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easier to find and share any data
that
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 to their interests , which broke all the boundaries that were restricting them from getting
a valuable
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valuable information
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information
. Not only does it enable people to use data for their own sake, but
also
 it saves more times and costs .
For example
 , researchers could distribute surveys and collect data online without going outside looking for volunteers to their studies.
Hence
, it is clear that individuals can not live without
information
technology
 because it has
significantely
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significantly
 contributed to a
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widespread
wide spread
 of knowledge over the world. Others opposed to
this
 say that the internet has breached the privacy of people.
Information
technology
 has exposed their personal
information
 to the
third
 parties
such
 as public authorities, private companies and hackers.
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Because
 most citizens store their
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 on the cloud servers owned by larger businesses, it might get leaked if there was a technical issue or cyber attack. The Sunday Times recently reported that cyberattacks have been increased for the
last
 ten years because when individual save their
information
 online, they are more likely to be
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vulnerable
 to these strikes.
However
, I would argue against
this
 perspective because
this
 drawback could be resolved by
improveing
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improving
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internet security and taking more
procautionary
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precautionary
 measures, To sum up, technological
information
have
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 a wide impact on
individuals's
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 lifestyle. I believe that
this
 type of development is advantageous because it has made their
life
 easy by looking for any pieces of
information
 online at lower cost and time.
Hence
, its merits
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 its disadvantages.
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