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Information technology is changing many aspects of our lives and now dominates our home, leisure and work activities. To what extent do the benefits of information technology outweigh the disadvantages?

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The advancement of
technology
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 has created a transformational change in every part of people's
life
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;
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 it is increasingly controlling
thier
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their
 personal and working
life
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.
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information
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technology
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 outweighs its drawback. The greatest benefit of
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nternet is facilitating the
life
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 of humans in all aspect of their
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daily
life
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. It has made it
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easier to find and share any data
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 to their interests , which broke all the boundaries that were restricting them from getting
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valuable information
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information
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. Not only does it enable people to use data for their own sake, but
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 it saves more times and costs .
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 , researchers could distribute surveys and collect data online without going outside looking for volunteers to their studies.
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, it is clear that individuals can not live without
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technology
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 because it has
significantely
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significantly
 contributed to a
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widespread
wide spread
 of knowledge over the world. Others opposed to
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 say that the internet has breached the privacy of people.
Information
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technology
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 has exposed their personal
information
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 to the
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 as public authorities, private companies and hackers.
Beacause
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Because
 most citizens store their
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data
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 on the cloud servers owned by larger businesses, it might get leaked if there was a technical issue or cyber attack. The Sunday Times recently reported that cyberattacks have been increased for the
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 ten years because when individual save their
information
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 online, they are more likely to be
valunerable
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vulnerable
 to these strikes.
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, I would argue against
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 perspective because
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 drawback could be resolved by
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improving
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internet security and taking more
procautionary
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precautionary
 measures, To sum up, technological
information
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have
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 a wide impact on
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individuals'
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 lifestyle. I believe that
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 type of development is advantageous because it has made their
life
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 easy by looking for any pieces of
information
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 online at lower cost and time.
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, its merits
exceeds
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 its disadvantages.
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