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Information technology is changing many aspects of our lives and now dominates our home, leisure and work activities. To what extent do the benefits of information technology outweigh the disadvantages?

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In today’s
world
,
technology
 has become an integral part of
people
’s
life
. There is no denying
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the fact that
people
 are becoming increasingly dependent on information
technology
.
However
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 coin. Excessive dependence on
technology
 leads to
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nhealthy
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 and isolation.
This
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dvantages of
technology
 do in fact outweigh
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 disadvantages. The huge dominance of information
technology
 can be attributed to the fact that it makes
life
 easier. Prior to
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dvent of
technology
, work and study used to be hectic and tedious.
However
, nowadays
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nternet gives
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 to numerous resources, which can enhance our work and study performance. Specifically, with just a click, students and workers, all around the
world
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ifferent perspective for solving
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articular problem .
Also
, areas of work have moved forward in leaps and bounds due to
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eplacement of old traditional data storage system with computers.
In addition
,
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 made the
world
- a global village.
In contrast
 with the past,
people
 can be in touch with anyone; from the comfort of their own home.
Also
, we can have information about any part of the
world
.
For instance
, a person from India can have knowledge of U.S foreign policies
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 a
second
.
Moreover
, we all have instant access to
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ntertainment industry- present on
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 of the globe. Various types of songs, shows, games
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 to serve in front of our screen these days. On the flip side, certain disadvantages are certainly associated with
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nfluence of
technology
.
Firstly
, it leads to
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nhealthy
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. Rather than doing any kind of physical activity,
for example
,
people
 are engaged
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 their computer and
smart phones
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 in their free time.
Furthermore
, it pushes
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erson towards isolation.
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people
 are connected to the
world
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 to lose humanly contact slowly. These days ,everybody is occupied by
technology
 , no one
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 time to have face-to-face interaction.
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, in long run, it might make
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erson despondent. Clearly, there are some negative aspects of
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technology
. Having said that,
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 disadvantages. Of course, it should be used sensibly and
people
 must take regular breaks from
technology
.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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