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Demand for gas and oil is increasing and so finding new sources in remote and untouched areas is a necessity.Do the advantages of this outweigh the disadvantages?

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Surging demand for
oil
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 and
gas
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 has made it necessary to find new
sources
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 in remote and untouched
areas
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. As the global population is rising day by day, the requirement of
oil
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 and
gas
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 is
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 increasing.
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 increased requirement of
oil
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 and gases cannot be satisfied until new
sources
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 in the remote and untouched
area
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 are found. Yes,the merits of finding new
sources
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 in the remote and untouched
area
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 definitely overpower its demerits. Let us discuss it in detail below.
To begin
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 with, let us shed light on the advantages of finding new
sources
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 of
oil
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 and
gas
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 in remote and untouched
areas
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.
First
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 and foremost, finding new
sources
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 in remote and untouched
areas
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 increases employment opportunities and
development
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 rate in that
area
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. To explain, in order to operate new factories and
oil
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 rigs in remote and untouched
areas
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, a large number of new workers are required. Since
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 demand can be easily fulfilled by local
people
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, they are hired for
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 purpose.
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, these factories in remote and untouched
areas
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 are run successfully if they are connected by good road and rail transportation.
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 of increased connectivity of the remote
area
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 with the developed world, the
development
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 of that
area
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 occurs and the living standard of
people
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 is raised. To illustrate, a survey conducted by UN in 2014 in the UAE, in ten newly excavated remote and untouched
areas
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 for
oil
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 revealed that employment was increased by 40% and
development
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 rate was doubled in those
areas
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.
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, finding new
sources
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 of
oil
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 and gases in remote and untouched
areas
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 has incremented per
capita
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income
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 of
people
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 of those
areas
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 because earnings of
people
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 have increased. To clarify, in order to construct roads, rails and refineries at remote and untouched
areas
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, vacant lands are acquired from native
people
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 at good prices.
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, revenues of local
people
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 increases and per
capita
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income
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 is raised. To cite an example, Mr Benjamin Bradlee, the Editor-in-chief of ‘Washington Post’ in his editorial on ‘Benefit of
oil
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 excavation at remote places’ in the April 2012 issue stated that per
capita
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income
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 of
people
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 of remote
areas
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 of Saudi Arabia was increased by 40% with establishment of
oil
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 rigs in those remote
areas
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.
On the contrary
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, finding new
sources
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 in remote and undeveloped
areas
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 has some demerits as well. Primarily, after putting more factories in the emote and untouched
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, pollution is increased in those
area
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 and natural resources are overexploited. To substantiate, when the ground is excavated for finding
oil
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 in remote
areas
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, sand particles get mixed in the air and become a source of pollution in those
areas
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.
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, in order to earn more profits, natural resources are
also
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 overexploited in remote and untouched
areas
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. As a consequence of the over-exploitation of natural resources in remote
areas
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, they will soon become extinct. To exemplify, a research conducted by University of British Columbia in 2015, in Iraq, on five newly established
oil
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 rigs in remote
areas
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 revealed that pollution was surged by 20% and rate of exploitation in those
areas
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 would extinct crude in 10 years. To encapsulate, it can be concluded that even though finding new
sources
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 of
oil
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 and
gas
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 in remote and untouched
areas
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 has some demerits, advantages have outweighed its disadvantages. Finding new
sources
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 in the remote and untouched
area
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 not only provides employment to
people
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 of these
areas
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 but it
also
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 increases
development
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 and per
capita
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income
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 of
such
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 remote
areas
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.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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  • economic benefits
  • job creation
  • infrastructure development
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  • habitat destruction
  • irreversible damage
  • perpetuates dependence
  • transitioning
  • indigenous and local communities
  • ethical and social challenges
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